Hee, that's cute. I think the thought bubbles would looks better if they were thicker lines though, to distinguish them more from the drawings. Also, try another font, perhaps? Blambot.com has some excellent comic fonts for free.

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LMAO Thank you for finally showing Rease fall under that big ass sword!! I've waited SIX-ish years for that!! Thank you lmao!!!!!!!

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Lol hoo-boy. Then yer really gonna enjoy pages 10-20 then.

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Hmmmm, I think perhaps your right on the outlines of the thought bubbles. Im gonna look into that .

And thank you for the link to the free font's, Im gonna make use of those as soon as I can.

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You like apostrophes don'tcha..."Materials"

Yea, I never was no good at the spellin . I need a spell checker I'm afraid.

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hmm, ok i have a few things for this one here. ok so the first ones i thought was to be read just like a manga: right to left. now i get to this one and its left to right. so which one is it? im so confused! the only other thing i really notice is the little curly cue things that are the clouds. make it so the clouds dont have o's and are a solid line like an m. you know what i ment when i say that? i think it adds a certain sense of...i want to say maturity but i think its more professional, yeah thats the word, professional quality to it. oh and the hand on the bottom guy pointing this all out, it looks disproportionate. the fingers look weird, n i mean all of em even though you can only see one you can see the others' knuckles. the whole size there looks off, but maybe its jsut me.


it looks really great man, the whole thing. i love how you shade with lines. very nice.

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Thanks . I do appreciate the critique and I am seriously looking into correcting the faults so I can do better next time.

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